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I am you… Don’t you recognize me? I am your mind. gah! this poem was so good...but that ending was a bit..er..cliche? (i really have to come up with a ...

I usually don't use that evil, overused word...but I have to. AH! Cliche. But, like always, I cover up for the poet. We can't help it - it's not like ...

There is not a quiver in your heart that I do not feel though we're miles apart, okay, as a sentance this doesn't make sense to me. There is not ...

i really liked this. it's an interesting view, even. my only complaint is that you used "Lebanon" so much that it became redunant and annoying. i mean, i know the ...

The sweet sea grass stirring as I watch in solemn vigil for friends who in the grave lie. this is too wordy for a sentance in poetry on one line. ...

i agree with firestarter - you're a great poet. and the beginning sounded like it had a meaning, and then you started talking about your headache. it was sort of ...

Who would let the leaves dive down onto the grass right in front of their home?" well, that's a mouthful. cut that down a bit, if you will. What if ...

although many will probably bombard you with comments about how cliche this is, i must stand in arguement aganist them. just because the subject is overused, it doesnt' mean that ...

i can see you were trying to uphold the rhyming pattern, but many of these do not "rhyme": You gave me hope, you gave me peace. At last, there was ...

With pearl-soft skin and angelic hair And luscious lips and blue eyes fair. too many "and"s. Fearing her voice ringing, "Leave;be gone!" But there she stayed, listening 'till the end, ...

From the bottom of my heart I knew you, I knew your mask and was touched by your gloves change the second "i knew" around. no suggestions. sorry. This hid ...

okay. your poetry is good. but i noticed a flaw in it because i do the same thing. now - your stanzas make sense and your imagery is wonderful - ...

Under a tree in a cemetery I found peace under a rock change one of the "under"s to "below" or something. i loved the images in the latter part of ...

I can relate with this feeling, as it is pure and true. But this can be expressed better and with less "baby"-ness. At least come up with something more interesting ...

I am not the vocabulary queen Nor am I the spelling bee And definitely not the grammar police I - - not the best of beginnings A rose is not ...